Friday, 26 August 2016

Olympic moment in time


W.A.L.T: Describe a moment in time in detail.




I heard my country screaming at me. I heard the crowd screaming for my country as I was running the home straight to the finish line. I saw the other racers behind me as I turned to the left . I felt a breeze from how fast I was running. I needed to keep sprinting to get to the finish line . I wondered if the others would pass me? but I knew they wouldn’t pass me


















2 comments:

  1. Hi Carter I like the way you used Capital letters and full stops. next time you could use a simile.

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  2. Hi Carter,

    Your writing is awesome.

    Next time use the picture of Usain Bolt doing what your writing about.

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